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सभ्य कौन !?

Posted by Rewa Smriti on April 20, 2012

पुरुष, तेरा पुरुषत्व कहाँ?

पुष्पहार, दिव्य गंध,
श्रेष्ठ आभूषण से लदे
अग्नि परीक्षा लेने वाला
मर्यादा पुरुषोत्तम,
है वो तेरा राम कहाँ?

अस्तित्व को खोता हुआ
तुम्हें खोजती,
धरा गयी है खीज
बोली विवश वह आज
सुन, खड़ा सभ्य अहंकारी
छलका सभ्यता का अहंकार
अगर कह सको?
कहो, तेरा पुरुषत्व कहाँ?

शब्द का श्रृंगार करता
पत्थरों के बीच
उलझा अतित
द्विधाग्रस्त, अचल, मौन
पत्थरों पर अंकित
पुरुषार्थ की कलरव गाने वाला
शंसय के सारे बाँध खोल!

सभ्य कौन यहाँ, पापी कौन?
बोल, धरा का इतिहास!
सम्मुख रक्खे किसका चरित्र?

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27 Responses to “सभ्य कौन !?”

  1. A scintillating work reflecting a true plight of males[I am also one among them].When the social values burn the sooty flame blackens the social mirrors and the image is not visible.But by your poetry a truth speaking mirror appears in the scenario which scans the persona of every humanbeing.Bravo! rewa true to your name you have proved that you are river of change which can throw the residues on the banks and mainstream everyone who dips himself in the stream of your verses.My compliments to you for writing such a responsible and reformative poetry! Keep on flowing and take a long course so that a vast civilization gets a dip into your stream of thoughts.Best of luck!

    • @Drvishwasaxena,

      Thank you so much bhaiya for your kind words and good wishes. I must say I am really thrilled for receiving compliments from you.

      Regards,
      your sis.

  2. great work !! i remember a friend who keeps on asking me am i a good girl ? that’s because of her past. she was doubted and humilated by her fiancy !! …. i dont want to talk about RAM or any one !, when we are about to marry someone.. its most common that boys does background verification… the very first thing they would like to look into is , iska kisi ke saath affair tha kya ? iska koi bf tha ?? , where in in girl side, most of time her parents will decide upon whether boy earns ? whether he is settled ? , girl will never ever happen to get that chance that she can go ahead and do background verification of her boy !! …

    well whats character is ?? you should think upon. not others !! everything depends on trust……. i have hell lot to tell.. well its just comment , so cant make this comment as blog.

    • @Satish,

      Hmmm, thank you so much for your kind words and comments!

      Hindi nahi aati hai? Seven years navodaya mein kya kar rahe the? Hehehe…. 😛

      rgds.

  3. Loved esp last one-
    सभ्य कौन यहाँ, पापी कौन?
    बोल, धरा का इतिहास!
    सम्मुख रक्खे किसका चरित्र?

    Characters are quite subjective in nature now and are being mingled with fast paced civilization, lifestyle. Rams are quite compromising and so are Sitas now… and we;d thank to society that even Sita has it’s own say now… she can refuse to be neglected or deserted…. still it needs some more time to be same number of female members in board as male.. but we’ve better share for them now…

    Hesitantly but yes, we’re celebrating the women’s success with more glory now and thank god that we din’t inculcate it from our past…

    Watch out.. they’re the force now… i’d love to be a house husband!! 🙂

    • @Manish Pandey,

      Thank you very much for your lovely comment and visit here.

      “Watch out.. they’re the force now… i’d love to be a house husband!!” I just love it. 🙂

      rgds.

  4. ILESH.... said

    nice line dii….. really …….it reflects the truth of our mythology and the alarm us”really we are a man”.
    “proud to be an INDIAN…” it gives us huge energy and joy …..and we also thought ooh yes we are an INDIAN….but now after 64-65 year we are like the same… the condition of women in india is like the same. The thoughts & feelings for the women are same as yearly. WE blindly accept the western culture, we wear like a whiteman but, our thought is same. For women we don’t want to accept the western culture because we are unable to see the wisdom of women.Is this fault of our ancestor ? no, this is our fault , this is fault of our thinking. Lord RAM also going wrong.
    “WE SHOULD THINK ABOUT HUMANITY NOT FOR MEN OR WOMEN ”
    Its time to change ourself .And think we really got the FREEDOM (about our thought)

    • @llesh,

      Thank you so much for your lovely comments on my creations.

      Yes, we must change. Because, the only way to change our lives is by changing our minds!

      rgds.

  5. kishor said

    nice poem kaviyitri jee

  6. Ranjeeta said

    Hi Rewa

    सभ्य कौन यहाँ, पापी कौन?
    बोल, धरा का इतिहास!
    सम्मुख रक्खे किसका चरित्र?

    It is a beautiful poem, not hard to understand but carries a great impact. Poem starts and ends with the question mark for such men who have lost all sense of manhood. पुरुष, तेरा पुरुषत्व कहाँ? – On Self-inquiry!!

  7. arjun said

    @Manish, well said:)

  8. kislaya said

    HEllo, Reva DI

    I am Kislaya ,98-2005 batch .poem me jo bate kahi gyi hai lagbhag sbhi ko samjh me aa gyi hongi, mujhe bhi ye litreray work bahut hi accha lga,bas ak baat aur kahni hai ki poet ko kabhi biased ya , brand nhi bnana chahiye,” kiska charitra, kaun sa charitra” ,agar ye bat samajh me aa jaye to sirf shanti hai..aur ak poet hamesha universal hota hai not in materialistic world also in spiritual world.he or she exploring the universe only nothing else.aisa sirf mera maanna hai…koi bhi personal opinion awam dawab nhi hai.

    Thankyou.

    • @Kislaya Kumar,

      Thank you so much for commenting on the blog.

      As Ranjeeta has mentioned a term in her above comment that is “self inquiry”! Thus, please use the” theory of self inquiry”! To be human means to ask yourself, and to be truly human means we must get an answer.

      Waise Kisi cheej ki vastvikta ko bina jane huye maanne se koi fayda nahi hai…Aksar Maani aur dusron se suni hui baaten galat hi hoti hai and also that can not lead to the real truth. Jahan tak baat personal opinion ya dawab ka hai, main na to kisi ke dawab mein aakar koi opinion create karti hun, na deti hun aur na hi change karti hun. I make my own opinion! Waise navodaya ne seven years mein hame yeh bhi sikhaya hai. 🙂

      rgds.

  9. Richa said

    शब्द का श्रृंगार करता
    पत्थरों के बीच
    उलझा अतित
    द्विधाग्रस्त, अचल, मौन
    पत्थरों पर अंकित
    पुरुषार्थ की कलरव गाने वाला
    शंसय के सारे बाँध खोल!

    सभ्य कौन यहाँ, पापी कौन?
    बोल, धरा का इतिहास!
    सम्मुख रक्खे किसका चरित्र?

    Hi Rewa
    It’s wonderful poem.You should definitively keep writing poems.
    All the while asking myself ‘who really has the weak character here?’ No matter how much men talk about women’s character and raise the issue, because they forget how to teach ‘a man how to be a man’. I observed men will often project, criticizing women for the very things that they themselves are guilty of, so it is best to avoid these people if you possibly can. I wish all the best to you and hope that all your dreams will come true.

  10. badal said

    Nice poem..Beautifully you have expressed it.How about turning this poem into a long post? A descriptive attempt Rewa Ji:)

    @Richa, Nice comment Richa:)

  11. jitendra kumar said

    WOW !!!! awesome diiii……… this poem shows how men r loosing their dignity.
    अस्तित्व को खोता हुआ
    तुम्हें खोजती,
    धरा गयी है खीज
    बोली विवश वह आज
    सुन, खड़ा सभ्य अहंकारी
    छलका सभ्यता का अहंकार
    अगर कह सको?
    कहो, तेरा पुरुषत्व कहाँ?
    this para is best of this poem according 2 me.

  12. Good poem

  13. No matter how much men talk about women’s character and raise the issue, because they forget how to teach ‘a man how to be a man’.

    @Richa,

    Well said! Thank you so much for your views and I agree with you. Why is it that people do not learn from history? Some people think history doesn’t matter, or that it can’t help us to understand our present conditions very well. But, those who do not learn from history are bound to repeat it.

    By the way, as man makes history and history is made by man only man can understand it. 🙂

    Rgds.

  14. @Badal,

    Thank you so much for your encouragement! I am not sure but I will try my best. Thank you for your suggestion.

    rgds.

    @Jitu,

    Thank you so much for liking my poem. Your best choice is remarked 🙂

  15. @Nityanand Gopalika,

    First of all, you are very welcome! I am so glad that you liked my little poem here.

    Thank you so much for visiting this place!

    Rgds.

  16. balram88 said

    Nice poem dii!!

  17. Vishal singh said

    Just owsum….keep it up di….:)

  18. @Balram,

    Thank you so much for reading and your lovely comment as well.

    @Vishal,

    Thank you so much for the lovely comment and compliment.

    rgds.

  19. Nidhi said

    U’re wow!gr8 poem,simply gr8.
    wonderfully penned down!!i especially lovd d title nd d 2nd verse in d poem!!!!!

  20. tarun said

    hi di
    realy u again did super job.. oohhhh awsm poem di.
    this question must b arised that पुरुष, तेरा पुरुषत्व कहाँ?
    ppl should try to think atleast few mints to their पुरुषत्व.

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