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दस्तक !

Posted by Rewa Smriti on March 28, 2008

बताना चाहती हूँ
चाहत का एहसास
जताना चाहती हूँ, पर
तुम, यहाँ पास नहीं हो
यह तकलीफ़ महसूस किया
जब यादों ने दस्तक दिया
और, क़लम ने आवाज़ लगायी!

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(written on 16/03/2008.)

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27 Responses to “दस्तक !”

  1. Vijaya Smriti said

    Bahut khoob!
    यह तकलीफ़ महसूस किया
    जब यादों ने दस्तक दिया
    और, क़लम ने आवाज़ लगायी
    Mujhe ye teen panktiyan bahut acchi lagi. khasker yadon ne dastak diya aur kalam ne awwaz lagayee.shabdon me khoob acchi tereh vyakt kerna ata hai aapko man ki bhavanao ko.
    Mogambo Khush hua..!

  2. Tanu Shree said

    बताना चाहती हूँ
    चाहत का एहसास
    जताना चाहती हूँ, पर
    तुम, यहाँ पास नहीं हो
    यह तकलीफ़ महसूस किया
    जब यादों ने दस्तक दिया||

    very touching di…..
    I really wish aisa pal kabhi na aaye jab koi apna door chala jaaye….

    meri yahi dua hai …
    jise aap dil se chaho humesha aapke paas ho… 😛

    Lots of luv!!

  3. mehek said

    kya kahun bahut bhavuk rachana hai,yaadon yuhi dastak deti hai,aur kisi ke na hona ka ehsas bhi,bahut sundar hai.

  4. @Viji, hmmm….udhar mogambo khush hua aur idhar mera dil khush hua tera pyara sa comment padhkar, shukriya dear!

    @Tanu, kab kahan kiske sath kya ho jaye yeh kise pata hai, but we have to face the situtaion, right? Tusi badi mazaki ho….aur ye dil se chahna kya hota hai? zara mujhe bhi batana 😉 …aur yeh jeebh kise dikha rahi hai ?

    @Mehek, thank you very much for appreciating the poem.

  5. Tanu Shree said

    yes di true ki kab kaha kiske sath kya ho jaye…. Bt still we can treasure up all the love we have fr the person.. and show it on the right time… u knw di “tell that some one ,that u love, that wat u r thinking of …if tommorow never comes”

    Dil se chahna kya hota hai ye mujhe batane ki zaroorat nahi hai di….U knw it very well ..hai na!! 🙂

  6. rohit said

    riwa
    kafi acha likhti ho, per lagta hai kabhi kabhi jaldi me hoti ho, yaa phir एहसास ko word nahi milte,…lakin aishe me hi to क़लम kaam aati hai,,,,,kalam ko rukne maat do,,,, kafi achai lagata hai, or hhaaaa, jara bihari or indian per jo baat likhi hai usper dhyan dena,,,
    rohit

  7. Tanweer said

    Kalam ki baat sunker mujhe ek sher yaad aagaya…..kisi aur ne likha hai….Plz don’t take it otherway….I am just citing it here…
    कलम था हाथ में, लीखना सीखाया अiपने.
    ताकत थी हाथ में,हौसला दीलाया आपने.
    मंजील थी सामने,रास्ता दीखाया आपने.
    हम तो सीर्फ़ दोस्त थे,आशीक बनाया आप ने.

  8. mai wahi hu.. jo mai nahi hu.. said

    …………..Bahut peete the hum……………………..
    ………………mahobbat ne kasam dilaake chhudaadi……………
    ……………………….Bahut peete the hum…………………………
    ……………………….usne kasam dilaake chhudaadi…………………..
    ………………………………Yaaron ke sang baitthe the…………………
    ……………………………………..mahobbat ki kasam dilaake pilaadi…………. 😮

  9. ab kisi ko bata mat dena.. said

    Sharab pee liya karte hai jinae ki tamanna main kabi,dagmagana bhi zaroori hai sambhalnae ke liye…. 😛

  10. promisse.. ye wala last hai :) said

    Maikhane mein baithe hai,peene,ek jaam tere naam ka,
    teri aahosh mein jo peene lage,
    toh phir hisaab hee na raha shaam ka,
    kehte hai humme sharabi log..
    hum kehte hai,sharab bina maikhana,
    aur sajni bina sajan,na kisi kaam ka….. 😛

  11. Ab ye wala mat padhna, pahle wala last tha :) said

    Mujhe duniya waalo sharabi na samjho,
    main peeta nahe hoon pilaayi gai hai….. 😛

  12. Ye tumhare liye.. meri taraf se.. duplicate.. plastic ke phool..with asli perfume.. said

    Thukra ke us ne mujko kaha ki MUSKURAO…….
    maine hans diya,
    Aakhir sawal uski khushi ka tha…
    Maine khoya woh jo mera tha hi nahi,
    usne khoya wo jo sirf usi ka tha 😉

  13. for Rohit.... said

    Are bhai..
    Jaldi me kaun hai..
    Rewa ya Riwa 😛

  14. lajawab

    humein to batana bhi nahin aata aur jatana bhi nahin aata 🙂

  15. Ek Ajnabi said

    बताना चाहती हूँ
    चाहत का एहसास
    जताना चाहती हूँ, पर
    तुम, यहाँ पास नहीं हो
    यह तकलीफ़ महसूस किया
    जब यादों ने दस्तक दिया
    और, क़लम ने आवाज़ लगायी!

    bahut khuub ….

    chahat ka ehsaas bataya nehi jata
    dhadkan ka raag sunaya nehi jata
    yaadon ko gale lagaya nehi jata
    takleef-se paas-unko bulaya-nehi jata
    ye ishq ka jadu hai mitaya nehi jata
    ek pal bhi unko bhulaya nehi jata,isliye
    DIL ki awaz ko kabhi dabaya nehi jata!

    ye ishq nehin asaan….

    Keep Smiling Always

    Ek Ajnabi

  16. Jitender Singh said

    बताना चाहती हूँ
    चाहत का एहसास|

    bhai waah …Rewa tum to bahut senti poems likhte ho very good keep on writing n sharing your wonderful lines …

    regds

    Jitender Singh

  17. Tanu Shree said

    @ Ek ajnabi ji very touching lines, n very true

    chahat ka ehsaas bataya nehi jata
    dhadkan ka raag sunaya nehi jata
    yaadon ko gale lagaya nehi jata
    takleef-se paas-unko bulaya-nehi jata
    ye ishq ka jadu hai mitaya nehi jata
    ek pal bhi unko bhulaya nehi jata,isliye
    DIL ki awaz ko kabhi dabaya nehi jata!

    ye ishq nehin asaan….

    wonderful …..

  18. @Tanu, dear don’t fear of tomorrow whether it comes or not…bus aaj ko jiyo aur jo karna hai aaj karo aur achhe se jee bharkar jiyo.

    @Rohit, aisi baat nahi hai, jaldi mein nahi rahti hun. One more thing, may be by mistake you are writing riwa instead of Rewa (रेवा स्मृति). Shukriya for appreciating my poem and I will surely reply to your comment there on ‘Bihari or Indian.’

    @Tanweer, chalo mere poem ke hi bahane yaad aaya or hame kuch padhne ka mouka mila. Shukriya for putting a shayri here. Don’t worry, I have not taken it in otherway.

    @Duplicate plastic ke phool Wale,

    April fool ka time aa raha hai, so koshish to achha kiya aapne but naqam raha. Waise achha kiya jo plastic ke phool with asli perfume bheja, kyunki log to aaj mandir mein bhi asli phool chadane se dadte hein! But I really don’t understand why you people are fear of writing your own name here!

    rgds

  19. Tanu said

    hahhahahah well said di…..

    “But I really don’t understand why you people are fear of writing your own name here!”

    Best wishes …. n loads of my lovely love 🙂

  20. Durlabh Darshan said

    Aji wo baat nahi hai
    ab mera naam hi aisa hai na ji
    isliye likhte hue thoda sankoch ho raha tha
    ab aap insist karte hai to daal deta hu
    but pleeezzzz.. 😛

  21. Shubh said

    Nice poem.

    I am not a poet. I want to know one thing about poem. Why do poets write small poems now a days? Is it a new trend, new style? In my school days I read poems of significant length.

  22. rohit said

    rewa (right)
    shabdo pe naa jaaoo, bhawanao (matlab dil ki bhawan) ko samzo….likhti raho ki assma tumhara hai, sunito raho ki jameen tuhari hai, har dastak ko pahchano, dil ke har aarjoo ko jano, ki (aage malloom nahi, puri kar dena)
    rohit

  23. Nidhi said

    Subhan Allah! ati sundar. apke kalam ki zordaar aawaz sun dil ne kaha Aawaaj do humko hum kho gaye 🙂

    Mr.Ek Ajnabi,

    chahat ka ehsaas bataya nehi jata
    dhadkan ka raag sunaya nehi jata
    DIL ki awaz ko kabhi dabaya nehi jata!

    -reflecting a contradictory feelings.

    Mr.DDji, duplicate dil wale Duplicate plastic ke phool hi dete hain. 😛

  24. Durlabh Darshan said

    Are kamal hai ji…
    AApne to DuRLABH dARSHAN jI ko overtake kar liya..
    Nidhiji Apko duplicate plastic ka fool dikha, to usme asli perfume ki khusbu nazar nahi aayi 😛
    Ab aap hi batao, agar apni jameen bhi aapke tarah upajau hoti, to maang kar kyo laate ? khud hi na likh dete kuchh?
    ab fool to maange hue hi hai ji, but usme se udti hui jo khusboo hai na, wo apni hai.. Lagta hai kuchh jyada hi bol riya hu.. 😛 bye bye

  25. Ek Ajnabi said

    chahat ka ehsaas bataya nehi jata
    dhadkan ka raag sunaya nehi jata
    DIL ki awaz ko kabhi dabaya nehi jata!

    -reflecting a contradictory feelings.

    Yes u are correct at this point …. thank you very much for pointing out this serious mistake …This shows at least few people seriously study the comments… my pleasure…

    Ye ishq nehi aasan…

    Ek Ajnabi

  26. Tarun said

    chhoti aur sundar

    kuch kehne ke liye kabhi kabhi jyada shabdo ki zaroorat nahi hoti …

    great work ..

    -tarun

  27. @Ek aur ajnabi, hmmm….usme to ham bhi fail hein. 🙂

    @Ek ajnabi, thank you so much for your comment and writing a poem.

    @Shubh, everything changes with time so the nature of poetry has changed and of course the poet’s mindset too. Actually I personally feel that it depends on the thinking of mind, coz it comes sudden in mind and when thought comes in mind it create or compose a poem and may be that is for a small moment. I don’t have much idea about it, but there must be some reason that i would try to let you know or if anybody know can explain here.

    @Jitender, sab apa jaise doston ka kamal hai…waise sabka apne dekhne ka nazariya hota hai.

    @Rohit, thnx for writing my name properly and commenting here. Koshish karungi pura karne ka.

    @Nidhi, shukriya dear! kab neend se jage kab so gaye…darte nahi the mout se, ab magar darne lage. Nice song, thanku for reminding me this.

    @Tarun, shukriya so much for appreciating the poem.

    rgds.

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