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कौन सा रास्ता है…!

Posted by Rewa Smriti on March 10, 2008

कौन सा रास्ता है, 
क्यूँ मुझे बुला रहा!

यह कैसी डगर है,
कहाँ मुझे ले जा रहा!

यहाँ ना ख़ुद की फिक्र,
ना ख़बर मंज़िल की हो रहा!
 
भाग रही है ज़िंदगी,
सब इनके पीछे भाग रहा!

ज़िंदगी के ज़द्द-ओ-ज़हद में,
क्यूँ हर शख्स परेशान दिख रहा!

कौन है वो, गुमसुम सा दूर, 
कोने में बैठा, ख़ुद को आज़मा रहा!

ग़लतियाँ ढूंढता, ख़ुद को भी कोसता,
मुड़कर ना देखा, ज़िंदगी हाथ से फिसल रहा!

कहते सब, हमसफ़र हो साथ चलो मेरे,
कोई ना जानता, किस मोड़ पर धोखा खा रहा!

ठोकरें ख़ाता, दर-ब-दर भटकता,
क़िस्मत आज़माता, दुनिया से चला जा रहा!

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23 Responses to “कौन सा रास्ता है…!”

  1. Jitender Singh said

    कौन है वो, गुमसुम सा दूर,
    कोने में बैठा, ख़ुद को आज़मा रहा!
    ..waah ..the poem has been written from the core of the heart … waah Rewa u r incredible…keep it up:

    Ban ke ehsaas meri dhadkan k paas rehte ho,
    Tasveer ban ke meri ankhon k paas rehte ho,
    Aaj puchna hai ek sawal tumse,
    Kya door reh kar tum bhi udaas rehte ho???

    regds

    Jitender Singh

  2. Shubh said

    Achhi Kavita hai 🙂

  3. Tanu Shree said

    Hmmmm di answer now…Kya sawaal hai…wah wah!!
    Well about this poetry di…Its just very very true…..

    Hope just smile comes ur way……..

    luv

  4. Tanweer said

    Very nicely written on the contemporary situation of people…..
    Insaan bina soche samjhe ja raha hai sirf ja raha hai… use apni manjil-e-maqsood bhi pata nahi….Aur ismein humsafar ki bewafai….

    कहते सब, हमसफ़र हो साथ चलो मेरे,
    कोई ना जानता, किस मोड़ पर धोखा खा रहा!

    Isi baat ko koi shayar is trah bayan kerte hai….

    Humko hai unse wafa ki umeed
    jo nahin jaante wafa kya hai….

    Thanks Rewa..God Bless you

  5. mehhekk said

    कहते सब, हमसफ़र हो साथ चलो मेरे,
    कोई ना जानता, किस मोड़ पर धोखा खा रहा!

    ठोकरें ख़ाता, दर-ब-दर भटकता,
    क़िस्मत आज़माता, दुनिया से चला जा रहा!

    kya kehne,itne sawal,sahi upar se sundar dekhati zindagi mein bahut sawal hote hai,bahut hi sundar rachana.

  6. ruchi said

    Dear Rewa

    bahut khoobsoorat..magar shayad har toofan ka ek saahil hota hai..

    “zindagi ki aagosh kuch aisi kasti chali jaati hai
    ki pata hi nahi chalta kab sargoshi cheekh banti chali jaati hai…
    yakeen hain magar mujhe ,
    kisi diwaane ke jigare se bahti ek nanhi dhaar,
    is cheekh ki goonj ko dooba degi..
    aur tujhe palak jhapakte,
    ek satrangi badaal ki baarish me bheega degi..”

  7. बढिया रचना है।

  8. kaafi gehrai hai aapke khayalon mein aur hunr usko shadbon mein badlane ka… bahut khoob. Kisi ko kehte suna hai “Jaane kis manzil ka raasta hoon main, har paon mujhe rondte hue guzre”.

  9. Amit said

    कौन है वो, गुमसुम सा दूर,
    कोने में बैठा, ख़ुद को आज़मा रहा!

    ग़लतियाँ ढूंढता, ख़ुद को भी कोसता,
    मुड़कर ना देखा, ज़िंदगी हाथ से फिसल रहा!

    Very true and very beautiful.

  10. @Jitender urf sonu, thank you very much for appreciating my poem. Sonu yaar itna ghisa pita or ghatiya sa sawal kyun puchte ho? Thoda dhang ka sawal kiya hota, otherwise mujhse kahte main tumhe isse bhi achhe sawal batati aur sath mein ans bhi bata deti. Chalo koi nahi aage se dhyan rakhna warna sare sawal delete kar dungi. ok!

    @Shubh, thanks a lot for liking the poem.

    @Tanu, bahanji ab tere koun se sawal hen? Mujhe to tera koi sawal dikh nahi raha hai to answer kya dun? hmmm…thank you so much for your lovely words. 🙂

  11. Tanu Shree said

    di actually mai ye puchna chah rahi thi…..

    Kya door reh kar tum bhi udaas rehte ho??????????

    tel me di…

    luv u!!! 😉

  12. Nidhi said

    भाग रही है ज़िंदगी,
    सब इनके पीछे भाग रहा!

    ठोकरें ख़ाता, दर-ब-दर भटकता,
    क़िस्मत आज़माता, दुनिया से चला जा रहा!

    Bahut khub, very beautiful poem. Aap itna achha or itna deep kaise soch leti hain??? Aap zindagi ke sacchai ko bahut sundar tarike sey ek pal men yahan likh diye hain.

    yah kya? Comnt kyon delete kiya? comnt mat delete mara karo.ok??

  13. Hi Tanweer, hmmm..jo wafa karna nahi jante unse bhi aap wafa ki umeed rakhte ho, kya sahi farmaya hai. Thank you for all of the kind words that you have said.

    Dear Mehek, thank you from the bottom of my heart for the kind words and for liking my poem.

    Hi Paramjit sir, bahut bahut dhanyawad for liking my poem and for leaving a comment.

    rgds

  14. Ruchi, tujhe kya likhun? Your words just inspired me to write more. I am moved by your praise and still moving, I just need your inspiration to keep on going. Thank you so much dear! luv you.

    @Ek Aur Ajnabi, this poem is very smooth. Good to hear from you again. Thank you for the comments on my poetry. Jinhone bhi kaha hai bahut achha kaha hai, I really liked it alot.

    @Amit, I am so glad you like My poem, thanks a lot.

    rgds.

  15. Ek Ajnabi said

    “कौन है वो, गुमसुम सा दूर,
    कोने में बैठा, ख़ुद को आज़मा रहा!”

    bahut khuub….

    apne dil se puucho kaun hai wo gumsum sa duur
    kone mein baitha khud ko aazmaa raha
    khaali haath aaya tha kuch maangne un se
    per khud hi apna dil -o- jaan luta ke chla ja raha
    khaawon ko haqeeqat mein dekhne ka khaaw
    mann hi mann mein liye jaa rahaa
    ae khuda sach karna unke sapne
    mohabbat ka kaarwaan jinhen bula raha…!

    ye ishq nehin aasan

    Keep Smiling

    Ek Ajnabi

  16. Hi Nidhi, thanks dear for your lovely and kind comment. I am sorry, Ok! Here after I wouldn’t delete any comment.

    Dear Tanu, na! main udas nahi rahti bcos I feel you are not far from me but you are near to me in my heart. mil gaya answer, ab khush?

    Anyway, thank you both for leaving comments here.

    @Mr. Ek Ajnabi, thanks a lot for your nice appreciation! You too have written a good poem. You write well, so why don’t you create your own blog and start writing poetry there? Anyway, thanks for visiting my blog and droping your comments.

    rgds.

  17. Ek Ajnabi said

    Hi

    Thanks for appreciation and suggestion …

    Ek Ajnabi

  18. vijaya smriti said

    aapne aajkal ki pareshan aur zaddo zahed bhari zindaki ko bahut acchi tereh shabdon me baandhker prastut kiya hai.bilkul sahi baat likhi insaan zindagi ke peeche bhag reha hai.aur wo isake peeche jitana zyada bhagta hai,zindagi utani door bhagati jaa reha hai.sabaki jaruraten itani jyada bad gayee hain ki khatm hi nahi ho paati.log jarurat poora karene ke saari zindagi jaddo-jahad karte hain aur zindagi jeena bhool jaate hain.aur iska ahsaas unhe tab hota hai jab zindagi unhe chhodker jaa rehi hoti hai.isi bhag daud ke karan manviya mulyon bhi patan ho reha hai.Log jitana sukh paane ki koshish karte hain lekin kuchh is tereh se karte hain ki sukh unse utani hi door chala jata hai.main ye nahi kehati ki hame ek behtar kal ke liye koshish nahi kerani chahiye.jarur kerani chahiye.nahi to insaan vikas kaise karega.lekin ek behtar kal ki koshish is tereh kerani chahiye ki hamara aaj barbaad bhi na ho.kyunki phir na jaane kal ho na ho.:)aur aisa na ho ki hum bas behtar kal ke liye hi koshish kerate reh jaaye aur hamara aane wala her kal usase behtar kal ki koshish me hi beet jaaye.

  19. darasal kuch dinon ke liye shehar mein nahin the… isliye yeh sannata :). Kya app dilli mein rehte hain aajkal ?

  20. Dear Viji, ab kya likhun? Tumne to bahut sahi or sab baat kah dali hai. Her log jeevan ke aapadhapi mein idhar udhar bhag rahe hein aur kuch log bus yeh soch kar ki kal kya hoga, pareshan ho kisi trah bus jee rahe hen. Hmmm…waise kal kya hoga kisko pata abhi zindagi ka le lo maza…hai na! I really feel proud to read such a mature thought from you.

    @Ek aur ajnabi, hmmm…..koi nahi kabhi-2 sannata hona bhi jarruri hai. No, I am not in delhi now. Ek baat bataiye aapne apni identity kyun chupa rakhi hai? Why do you use id ‘ek aur ajnabi’ for commenting here?

    rgds.

  21. Chupaya to kuch bhi nahin humnein. humara email address to aapko visible hi hoga (I assume). Bas jab hum pehli baar aapki mehfil me aaye, to andaaza nahin tha ki yeh safar kitni door jayega. Humein aapki shabd rachna achchi lagi, aur usko humse rubroo karwaane ke liye aapka shukriya karna chahte the. Chunki aapki mehfil mein ‘Ek Ajnabi’ already tha to hum ‘Ek Aur Ajnabi’ ban gaye 🙂

  22. I didn’t know that the email add you mention is right one, so i asked. Haanji, aapne bahut achha kiya ek aur ajnabi bankar, kyunki ek mere blog ke liye kafi nahi tha 😉 thanx!

    rgds

  23. Dr Vishwas Saxena said

    rewa
    a good portrayal of state of confusion and uncertainity! yet I feel you have stoped before completing the poem,if you agree and dont get angry i expect you could have cited some remedy for this state or in few lines you could have shown some motivational meters for him—I know you can do it,add a few lines to energise this morose,sad and confused entity or generations will be deprived to get their their answer!Become अखंड प्रवाहिनी as you call yourself and taking him in your sway give him movement.blessings to you and with immense appreciation to your composition
    Dr Vishwas saxena

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