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थम गयी है मेरी कलम…!

Posted by Rewa Smriti on October 30, 2007

आज क्यूं,
नही लिख पा रही,
मैं कविता!

थम गयी है ज़िंदगी,
खो गये सारे शब्द,
कहाँ से लाऊँ वो पल,
वो लफ्ज़ दिल के,
अब तो थर्रा रही हें,
मेरी बाहें!

थक गयी हें उंगलियाँ,
थक गयी मेरी कलम,
फीकी पर गयी स्याही,
फिर कैसे लिखूं,
आज मैं,
कुछ अपनी बातें,
नज़मो में!

जज़्बात कहीं खो गये,
बेजान हो गये हम,
है नही कोई उम्मीद,
इसलिए,
आहिस्ता-आहिस्ता,
आज अचानक,
थम गयी है मेरी कलम!

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34 Responses to “थम गयी है मेरी कलम…!”

  1. बहुत खूब! कविता लिख भी दी और कह रही हैं-

    आज क्यूं,
    नही लिख पा रही,
    मैं कविता!

    बढिया रचना है।बधाई।

  2. कलम चाहे अब थम जाए
    पर कीबोर्ड न रूकने पाए
    ऊंगलियां न थकने पाएं
    विचार नहीं छिपने पाएं

  3. Amit said

    जज़्बात कहीं खो गये,
    बेजान हो गये हम,
    है नही कोई उम्मीद,
    इसलिए,
    आहिस्ता आहिस्ता,
    आज अचानक,
    थम गयी है मेरी कलम!

    are waah kya likha hai..bahut khubsurat!
    ‘थम गयी है मेरी कलम’ hamesha ya kuchh der ke liye?

    Rewa, what made you to write this poem? are you ok? keep writing.

  4. Moonie said

    Though I like the flow but something is amiss. never heard of a limb “थर्रा”, I thought only lips did that. Some polish required.

  5. Hi Paramjit sir,

    You are Welcome in my blog! I am very happy to read your comment! bahut dino se kuchh likh nahi pa rahi thee to socha yah hi likh deti hun. 🙂 Thank you v much for appreciating my poem.

    Hello Avinash sir,

    Main aapka apne blog world mein swagat karti hun. Aapki kavita padhkar main bahut khush hun. jab ungaliyan hi thak gayi hai to type kaise karungi. hehehe…. 😉 aapke or Paramjit sir ke blog ko main kal visit ki. bahut achha laga padhkar kuchh articles and poems. abhi sara to nahi padh payi hun but dheere -2 I will read more.

    Note: Sir, ek request hai meri galtiyan bhi dekhen aaplog aur mujhe bataiye taki main improve kar sakun. Dhanyawad!

  6. Hi Moonie,

    First of all I would like to welcome you here. Thank you very much for your comment. Thank u for suggestion. 🙂

    Moonie, you might not be heared but as per my knowledge goes I think “थर्रा” word can be used for “बाहें” too!

    ‘थर्रा’ means ‘कपकपाना’ or बाहें भी तो कपकपा सकती है.

    I have read somwhere. yeh jameen थर्रा gayi….., हिमालय भी थर्रा उठेगा, एक कॉल पर थर्रा सकती है घाटी…., परशुराम की क्रोध ज्वाला से पूरी जनकपुरी थर्रा गई….., etc. many such example, so I would say ‘थर्रा’ is not only use for lips but for many other situtaions and context. Moonie, if I am wrong plz correct me.

    Hello Amit, Thanks a lot for your comment. I am quite ok, actually since few days I was not able to write anything, bus yah sochkar yeh poem jis din post ki usdin sham ko khud bakhud likha gaya….no other reason. Abhi hamesha ke liye nahi thami hai meri kalam. Tumhe lagta hai ki yah hamesha ke liye tham sakta hai? 🙂

    Rgds.

  7. Ruchi said

    Well, as far as the usage of the word “थर्रा” is concerned,being a student of language and literature, I would like to throw light over the fact that in the world of Literature, irrespective of which language it is in, be it hindi, english, japanese, korean etc., a word can be freely used within a wide spectrum of nuances, depending upon the context and offcoures the style of the author. We should try to refrain ourselves from changing the language of any poem , because when the poem is penned down, it is not simply a group of words but a flow of honest emotions, hence editing it later has chances of altering its originality and often the essence.

    Hence I think Rewa that the poem is beautiful as it is , and i would suggest you to please retain the original wordings.

  8. mayur said

    Hi Rewa,
    I enjoy reading all your poems. quite expressive. I found it something so depressing, but also a pretty good poem.

  9. surabhi said

    Heyyy..

    am anyways a die-hard fan of all ur writings..!! U shud take free-lance writing as a profession.

  10. Dino said

    Hi Rewa Smriti,

    Well aapne itani achhi poem likhi hai ki uske baare me likhne ke liye mujhe words nahi mil pa rahe hain….
    fir bhi thodi si koshish ki hai kuch adhure words ko le kar kuch likhne ki…
    main aapke jaisa to nahi likh sakta but thoda sa likhne ki koshish ki hai..I hope aap ise bhi pura kar doge..

    Kuch Likhna Chahata Hoon
    Sochta Hoon Kya Likhoon ?

    Pholoon Ki Woh Mehakti Khushboo
    Barish Ka Woh Bhega Pani
    Aur Hawa Mein Thi Jo Rawani
    Kya Uss Mousam Ka Khumaar Likhoon?
    ya us shakash ka naam likhoon jisne ye kavita likhi..

    Kuch Likhna Chahata Hoon
    Sochta Hoon Kya Likhoon?

  11. Ek Ajnabi said

    आज क्यूं,
    नही लिख पा रही,
    मैं कविता!

    थम गयी है ज़िंदगी,
    खो गये सारे शब्द,
    कहाँ से लाऊँ वो पल,
    वो लफ्ज़ दिल के,
    अब तो थर्रा रही हें,
    मेरी बाहें!

    थक गयी हें उंगलियाँ,
    थक गयी मेरी कलम,
    फीकी पर गयी स्याही,
    फिर कैसे लिखूं,
    आज मैं,
    कुछ अपनी बाते,
    नज़मो में!

    जज़्बात कहीं खो गये,
    बेजान हो गये हम,
    है नही कोई उम्मीद,
    इसलिए,
    आहिस्ता-आहिस्ता,
    आज अचानक,
    थम गयी है मेरी कलम!

    Bahut khuuub…..beautiful….. At the moment these lines come to my mind:

    Pyaar koi bol nahi pyaar awaaz nahi,
    ek khamoshi kai sunti hai kaha karti hai,
    na yeh bujhti hai na rukti hai na thehri hai kahin,
    noor ki boond hai sadiyon se baha karti hai……………

    So “Kalam thamm bhi jaaye to” khaamoshi sab kuch keh jaati hai….

    Keep on Smiling and Writing

    Ek Ajnabi …
    Dil Se

  12. amu said

    hi di.
    aapki kalam thak sakti hai,bahen thak sakti hai,ungli thak sakti hai,dil aur jajbat bhi kuch samaye ke liye thak sakte hain. par! aapka mastisk ,apke wichar nahi thak sakte. tabhi to apne thakte hue bhi itni sundar rachna kar di.
    aur ummid pe to duniya kayam hai.

  13. Ashish said

    Nice one…..Great!!!

  14. shweta said

    abhi to usha kal hai
    yun abhi se thamna kaisa?
    chhanv hogi raste pe kab kaha tha?
    dhup me hi jalna hoga
    ankh chahe dabdabaye,
    banhein chahe tharra jayein
    panvon ko to chalna hoga.
    yatra hogi sukhad aisa nahi koi vayda tha
    han magar manjil jahan hai,
    vahan hum tum phir milenge

    to aaj phir lehkni utha ke
    shabdon ke kuchh bane bun lo
    kano me maine kaha hai
    zindagi ka mantra sun lo

    aur phir ek bar likh do
    apne dil ki bat jo hai
    ashk ho ya muskurahat
    tum sang mera hath jo hai

  15. shweta said

    ye thakan kuchh der ki hai
    ek gumsum rat jaisi
    badalon ke par sahmi si
    kiran vo bhor ki hai

    arre rewa di hibernate ho rahi hain kya? aisa hai to boliye na hum hain na apko fultu masti se charge karne ke liye…….hum kab kam ayenge

    jokes apart.lovely creation.beautiful words knitted beautifully.

  16. Shweta, thanx for appreciation. Nice poem dear!…..hmmmm lagta hai full charge mei ho….batery kahan se li hai?? 😛

  17. shweta said

    arre apni HP ki hi hai…………jyada to technical hua nahi jata par masti marne ke liye batery backup apna mast hai

  18. Haanji….delhi pahunch gayi ho ab to masti marogi hi….do you remember last yr on same date we met in delhi? really missing your campany this time.

  19. shweta said

    ofcourse i remember.so where is the treat for celebrating anniversary?
    just joking.i ve got enough from you.
    missing you a lot.
    nd delhi pahunch ke aish kahe hi……have to work my ass off now. 😦

  20. Ashish, welcome you to my blog and thank you very much for your appreciation…!

    shweta, don’t worry…..next month we will celebrate our anniversary dhamaka together…. 🙂

  21. Faiyaz said

    थम गयी है ज़िंदगी,
    खो गये सारे शब्द,
    कहाँ से लाऊँ वो पल,
    वो लफ्ज़ दिल के,
    अब तो थर्रा रही हें,
    मेरी बाहें!

    Very beautiful poem… I am really impressed by your writings. This is my first visit in your blog. Actually I have heard about u via Ali Sir (Principal at JNV, Darbhanga). I have never heard that you have interest in this side also. Now I used to visit this Blog always. Can u permit me?

  22. Hi Faiyaz sir,

    At first I would Welcome you to my blog! I am amazed to received your comment. Thanx a lot for appreciating my writings. You know somthing, you won’t believe that i am so much happy to read Ali sir’s name in your comment on my blog. I am really thankful to you!

    hey….you need not to ask permition for visiting my blog. I will be happy to read your words here. Really, your comment will make me smile, so plz keep visiting! 🙂

    rgds.

  23. Nidhi said

    This is a most beautiful poem. I can feel the sentiments in the words and it really touched my heart, i just love it!
    But,
    थम गयी है मेरी कलम!- kyon?
    agar yah kalam tham gayi to hazaron logon ki dhadkan tham jayegi.
    ishliye pls aap kalam ko rukne na dena.

  24. Amit said

    Dua Hai Khuda se ki yeh kalam kabhi na ruke. Tum aise hi likhte raho.

  25. Dear Nidhi, thanx for your lovely comment. Ab bus bhi karo…itni bhi taaqat abhi mere kalam mei nahi hai ki kisi ki dharkan rok dun. Waise her kyun ka jawab nahi hota 😉 😛

    @Amit, thnx a lot. I wish aapki duwa kabul ho 🙂

  26. Vishal said

    Beautiful poem. keep writing more.

  27. anonymous said

    जज़्बात कहीं खो गये,
    बेजान हो गये हम,
    है नही कोई उम्मीद,
    इसलिए,
    आहिस्ता आहिस्ता,
    आज अचानक,
    थम गयी है मेरी कलम!

    great lines..m speechless

  28. Hemant said

    Good nice poem. Arye yeh kya kyon tham gayee hain meri ungliyan comment likhane mein bhi……….

  29. Hi Vishal, thanku so much for appreciating my poem.

    @anonymous, 1st of all thanku so much….I got your mail id and by that I got to know your name if you are the same and correct one. 🙂

    Hemant, mujhe pata hai….aapki hathen to khane mein bhi thak kar tham jati hogi….so plz plz khana bhi mat khana 😛

  30. mehhekk said

    very very touching,sometimes we feel thisway to.

  31. Dino said

    Pathar ki hai Duniya, jazbat nahi samajti,
    Dil me kya hai Wo baat nai samjti,

    Tanha to Chand bhi hai sitaro ke bich,
    magar Chand ka Dard Bewafa Raat nahi samjhati.

  32. Dear Mehek, thanku very much for your lovely comment on my blog.

    Hey Dino…kya baat hai ajkal shayari bahut copy paste kar rahe ho 😉 waise tumhara comment padh mjhe ek song yaad aa rahi hai..yahan daal rahi hun…sun lena 😉

    Yeh raat khushnaseeb hai jo apne chaand ko
    Kaleje se lagaaye so rahi hai…..from the movie ‘AINAA’.

  33. Dr Vishwas Saxena said

    Dear Author
    If your pen has stopped then it is attributed mainly to usher a new phase of life—dont you please adhere to past and become closed to your brighter future! a fantastic tomarrow is knocking your door,hear that if you can.Forget the past and run with the time many beautiful moments await you ahead.I assure you this.
    Dr Vishwas Saxena

  34. Karna said

    Kavi ki kalpana ki udan banki hai,
    abhi bhi kalam me kuchh jaan banki hai
    tham gayee hai kalam kyunki,kavi
    ke sonch me aur kuchh udan banki hai,
    wo dekhta un sawalo ko jo janam lena abhi banki hai,
    ruk gayee hai kalam thak gayee hai ungliya par ek aash banki hai,
    darakhto pe lagi hai kuchh sanjeevani jise le kar aana banki hai,
    chalne lagegi ye ungliya ye sonch kar abhi mujhme pran banki hai,
    is mamrm ko jaan kar dub gaya kalpna ke sagar me
    chalne lagi ungliya mit gayee thakan
    liye huye kalam ki mushkan, jaise hi mila use zindgi or kalapna ki nayee udan.

    Hi realy i must say don’t stop writing till your last breath, jindgi me kuchh padaow aate hai per wo manzil nahi hoti ,

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