शब्द मेरे तुम कहाँ खो गये…!
Posted by Rewa Smriti on January 14, 2008
शब्द,
मेरे अपने,
तुम कहाँ खो गये?
देकर,
दुनिया में दस्तक,
बिन आहें भरे,
आज,
कर दिल में दफ़न,
भीड़ में,
हो गये खामोश,
या,
अचानक,
आसानी से,
एक अजनबी बन,
तुम ख़ुद को,
ख़ुद ही में खो गये!
शब्द मेरे,
तुम कहाँ खो गये!
mehhekk said
nice short but in depth
Rewa Smriti said
Hi Mehhekk,
Welcome you @ my blog and happy new year. Thnx for dropping your comment here. Do you have your own blog? If you have plz leave the link.
rgds
Kamlesh said
Very Nice!
Bhavnao ko samjhiye shabdo me kya rekha hai.
KK
Ek Ajnabi said
अचानक,आसानी से,एक अजनबी बन,
तुम ख़ुद को,ख़ुद ही में खो गये!
शब्द मेरे, तुम कहाँ खो गये!
Baut khuub….
shabdon ke gumm hone ki kyon wo baat farmaate hain?
dil ki awaaz hai ye kyon wo sun-ne se katra jaate hain?
manzil ke kareeb kyon wo laut jaane ki baat karte hain?
paya nehin unko to kyon wo un shabdon ko Ajnabi karaar dete hain?
ye ishq nehin aasan
Keep Smiling Always
Ek Ajnabi…
Ramesh Kumar said
Hi Rewa,
Very nice Poem…Really its a very nice..keep it up…!!!!
My Good Wishes will be always with you….!!!
!!!…God Bless You…!!!
Ramesh..
Prem Piyush said
पढ़कर ऐसा लगा कि शब्द खोकर भी अच्छी कविताएँ बन जाती है । लेखनी को शुभकामनाएँ ।
Rewa Smriti said
Kamlesh,
Mere char anmol ratan mei se ek, mere babu, yah batao main apne pyare bhai mere anmol ratans ke dilon ki bhavnao ko samajh rahi hun….yah kya kam hai?
@Mr. ek Ajnabi,
Main bus apne khoye shabdon ko dhoondh rahi hun. Aap mere shabdon ke jaal mei na pare…isme jo uljhe to din ko tare dekhne par jayenge….waise agar sabki dil ki aawaz sunne chale to beech bhanwar mein bhatakne mei beesh mnt bhi nahi lagega…! Samjhe aap?
Hi Ramesh,
I welcome you @ my blog world! Thank you very much for your lovely words with your best wishes for me. I am happy to read your comment here. Thnx alot!
Hi Prem sir,
Shabd kho jate hen per bhavnayen kab khoti hai? Aur jab bhavnayen zivit hen to shabd khote huye bhi sath de jate hen….mere liye itna hi kafi hai! shukriya for giving शुभकामनाएँ to my lekhni.
rgds.
Amit said
Hi Rewa, Happy New Year 2008. Have an unique year ahead.
A Beautiful Expression.
Ek Ajnabi said
@Mr. ek Ajnabi,
Main bus apne khoye shabdon ko dhoondh rahi hun. Aap mere shabdon ke jaal mei na pare…isme jo uljhe to din ko tare dekhne par jayenge….waise agar sabki dil ki aawaz sunne chale to beech bhanwar mein bhatakne mei beesh mnt bhi nahi lagega…! Samjhe aap?
bahut khuub farmaya aapne ….
kuch hum bhi farmaayen kuch is qadar gaur keejiega:
khona aur pana to dunya ka hai dastuur
fir chaahe shabd ho ya dil kya farak padta hai huzur?
khone ka dard aap kya jaane jo hain shayad magruur
dil ki awaaz suni nehi jaati sun jaati hai huzur
aayega wo din bhi jab ye deewar ho jaayegi chuur
sab kuch sanwar jata hai jab chha jata hai wo nuur
bhatkte wo hain jo nadan hain aur darte hain huzur!
jaldi kijiye is se pehle ki bik jaayen saare khazuuur!
Keep Smiling Always
Ek Ajnabi
Ek Aur Ajnabi said
yun kuch kehna, ki kuch kaha bhi nahin, aur byan kar dena haal-e-dil, fitrat yeh is shayar ki …
Shukriya likhte rehne ke liye …
Rewa Smriti said
Hi Amit, happy new year to you too! Thnx alot for your comment.
@Mr. Ek Ajnabi,
Sochi thee aap samajh jayenge meri baaten lekin afsos…! Aapne jo bhi farmaya hai uske liye dhanyawad…ab thora meri taraf se…
हमें ना समझाइये आप मगरूर दुनिया का ये दस्तूर,
घाट – घाट का पानी पीने का हो गया है आपको सुरूर!
कहते हें, लंगूर की तमन्ना हमेशा खाने को होती है अंगूर,
ऐसे दीवानों के भी हमने आसानी से अक्सर तोड़ा है गुरूर!
गौर फरमाईएगा, अब भी वक़्त है, ज़रा संभलकर…
हमारे हुनर बोलते है, बेच दूँगी चुटकी में आपके सारे ख़ज़ूर,
फिर ना कहिएगा, हम तो लूट गये सरेआम भरी महफ़िल में हुज़ूर…!
@Ek Aur Ajnabi,
Hmmm… Shayar ki fitrat to samajh mein aa gayi…aur yah bhi maloom hai badi asani se byan kar dete hein yelog apna haal-e-dil, lekin jab thokar khate hen to fir kahte hen….Main Shayar badnam….!
Waise aap dono Ajnabiji ko bahut bahut shukriya!
rgds.
suraj said
You lost your words…..but there are many who have lost their worlds…!! For their worlds….no blame but for your words you may put the blame on them(those who have no worlds) and me (for giving no words and worlds) to any one!
Shubh Mishra said
Nice Poem.Keep it up…
Rewa Smriti said
Hi Suraj,
Thank you very much for droping by your lovely words here. I liked your comment. You are very right but I wouldn’t blame anybody for that as I think if I loose my words, I will be the only responsible for that.
Hi Shubh,
Welcome to my blog and thnx a lot that you liked my poem. Keep visiting.
rgds.
Nidhi said
Beautiful poem.
हमारे हुनर बोलते है, बेच दूँगी चुटकी में आपके सारे ख़ज़ूर,
फिर ना कहिएगा, हम तो लूट गये सरेआम भरी महफ़िल में हुज़ूर…!
I must say isko kahte hain ‘nahle pe dahla’
Shabd jaal mein phas gaye ye to
shabd taal pe nach gaye ye to
Shabd nagar mein ho gayi inki shaam
shabd taal mein aake bhatke
shabd jaal jo isne phenka
Aage jo bhali kare, Ram
Haiyya haiyya haiyya…
Aage….????? Ab mere kehne ke liye bhi shabd nahin bache.hahahahaha…
RAHUL said
HELLO, I WAS SEARCHING UNPUBLISHED HINDI LYRICS , I FOUND YOUR SOME BEAUTIFUL WORDS. TS IS VERY GOOD .I THINK U HAVE DEEP EMOTIONS.
I AM WROTE SOME ORIGINAL LYRICS . U CAN SEE IT
(NEWLYRICIST.BLOGSPOT.COM)
PLEASE SEE IT AND GIVE ME YOUR VALUABLE COMMENT .PLEASE
Rewa Smriti said
Hi Nidhi,
Shukriya ji…Tum bhi na kuchh kam nahi ho…ab aage tum kya chahti ho? kya kahun tumhe ab…By the way mam tum kis nagar mein fasne wali ho?
Hi Rahul,
Thanx alot that you liked my some words. I read your poems…I suppose you recently started writing there. I have left a comment in your blog for you. Anyway, you keep writing, will read your all poems.
rgds.
Ek Ajnabi said
हमें ना समझाइये आप मगरूर दुनिया का ये दस्तूर,
घाट – घाट का पानी पीने का हो गया है आपको सुरूर!
कहते हें, लंगूर की तमन्ना हमेशा खाने को होती है अंगूर,
ऐसे दीवानों के भी हमने आसानी से अक्सर तोड़ा है गुरूर!
गौर फरमाईएगा, अब भी वक़्त है, ज़रा संभलकर…
हमारे हुनर बोलते है, बेच दूँगी चुटकी में आपके सारे ख़ज़ूर,
फिर ना कहिएगा, हम तो लूट गये सरेआम भरी महफ़िल में हुज़ूर…!
ati sunder
kehte hain chutki mein bikwa denge wo humare khazzzur
per yahi to chaahte hain hum ae husn-e-noor
jab log jaan de sakte hain mohabbat mein to kya cheez hai ye khazzur
ab chaahe angur kahen wo ya kahen humen langoor
banda hazir hai jo bhi mann mein aaye farmayiega zarur
aazmaa kar dekh len wo humen thak kar ho jayenge chuur
gum nehi bhari mehfil mein lutne ka ek baar wo waqt to aaye jarur
ab dekhenge maidaane jung mein hum nazdeek hain ya hain unke duur
koi keh de unko jara sambahl ke fir gana na pade unko bhi tera suruuuur!
Keep on Smiling
Ek Ajnabi
fir se…
Rewa Smriti said
Hi Mr.Ek Ajnabi,
I thought you will not write more and would not take any kind of panga….but aapne shabdon se panga le liya. Anyway, I hope you wouldn’t cross the lakshaman line in my blog.
Waise aage kuchh aise ARZ hai……
दर-ब-दर भटकने पर भूल जाएँगे आप यह जोश-ए-जुनून,
हमसे पंगा लेने का अंज़ाम तो आप जानते ही हें हुज़ूर!
दर्द-ए-दिल-ए-बीमारी का दवा लेने आईएगा यूँ होकर मज़बूर,
ज़ोर का झटका धीरे से लगने का किस्सा-ए-दर्द सुनाइएगा ज़रूर!
फिर खुलेआम कोलकॉता के सड़कों पर बैठ बेचिएगा आप गुड़,
ख़ुदा ख़ैर करे, शायद आपके किस्मत को यही है मंज़ूर!
गुस्ताख़ी माफ़ हो, गर हुई मुठभेड़ तो कर दूँगी चकनाचूर,
एक ही फूक़ पर, सर-ए-बाज़ार में उड़ जाएँगे आपके सारे गुरूर!
rgds
rahul said
hi, rewa i am highly thankfull for your nice comment. i have wrote 40 songs, but i will published later.
today i read your poems second time , i found that u have fresh ideas with deep emotions.these poems r free aspirations of young generation.
u know more than me so please keep on i will read definitely. thanx
mehhekk said
hi rewa sorry late for replay.this is my link for my own blog named mehek.
http://mehhekk.wordpress.com/
Kamini said
Bahut khoob didi ji….apka bhi jawab nahi
really nice to know you.
Kamini said
Okay dear Rewa,
you write very well…
Rewa Smriti said
Hi Rahul, thanx for reading and liking my poems. hey, each person have their own ideas, i don’t know more than you…
Dear Mehek, thank you very much for providing link to me, I am reading your blog and enjoying.
Hi Kamini, shukriya for your lovely comment.
Nidhi said
गुस्ताख़ी माफ़ हो, गर हुई मुठभेड़ तो कर दूँगी चकनाचूर,
एक ही फूक़ पर, सर-ए-बाज़ार में उड़ जाएँगे आपके सारे गुरूर!
wah wah wah
kya khoob farmaya hai!!!!!!
Naresh said
Awesome…
Cool..
Touching..
http://blindsquare.blogspot.com
Rewa Smriti said
Nidhiji, dhanyawad for wah wah karne ke liye
Hi Mr. Naresh, welcome you @ my blog world. Thank you very much for your appreciation. And also thanx for leaving link of ur blog here, I will read it.
rgds.
Ek Ajnabi said
दर-ब-दर भटकने पर भूल जाएँगे आप यह जोश-ए-जुनून,
हमसे पंगा लेने का अंज़ाम तो आप जानते ही हें हुज़ूर!
दर्द-ए-दिल-ए-बीमारी का दवा लेने आईएगा यूँ होकर मज़बूर,
ज़ोर का झटका धीरे से लगने का किस्सा-ए-दर्द सुनाइएगा ज़रूर!
फिर खुलेआम कोलकॉता के सड़कों पर बैठ बेचिएगा आप गुड़,
ख़ुदा ख़ैर करे, शायद आपके किस्मत को यही है मंज़ूर!
गुस्ताख़ी माफ़ हो, गर हुई मुठभेड़ तो कर दूँगी चकनाचूर,
एक ही फूक़ पर, सर-ए-बाज़ार में उड़ जाएँगे आपके सारे गुरूर!
bahut khuub….
hum dhanya hue unke vicharon se hoke rubaru
koi keh de unhen hum jaa rahe hain unse duur
nehin-zarurat gustakhi ki-na karne ki chaknachur
khubyan to na thee hum-me itni hum maante hain ye huzur
per bhulna asaan na hoga, hum kar jayenge aisa kuch zarur
dhundhenge wo khud hi humen hoke mazbuur
ae khuda slamat rakhna unhen ye hum kahenge zarur …
Ye ishq nehin asan
Ek Ajnabi
विनय प्रजापति said
आसानी से,
एक अजनबी बन,
तुम ख़ुद को,
ख़ुद ही में खो गये!
nice depth.
Juneli said
I felt that this poem is expressing my own feelings………………
Bahut din huye (lagbhag paanch manina)…..
shabd mere kho gaye aur khud bhaav bhi……
……I’m still going through the same stage……………
Rewa Smriti said
@Mr Ajnabi,
किसी को ढूँढना और उसके लिए भटकना हमे नही मंज़ूर,
जीती हूँ एक्कीसवीं सदी में यह थोड़ा आप भी जान लें ज़रूर!
अब तो छोड़िए बहसबाज़ी, काम पर लग जाइए हुज़ूर,
शुक्रगुज़ार रहूंगी गर ख़ुदा को हो जाए आपकी ख़ुदाई क़बूल!
@Vinayji, Bahut shukriya!
Dear Juneli, I cud understand your feelings and closeness towards this poem. But thats the life and we have to accept everything in life. Bhav to tumhare dil mein bhari padi hai aur shabd itni aasani se tum kho nahi sakti. So, you take some time and plz come back on same track. God bless you!
rgds
arun said
wah kya khub likha hai !
bahut khub !!
subhan allah !!!
ok ! shabd to nayab hote hai , lagata hai ki kho gaye par khote nahi.
atma ki tarah pavitra aur amar , avinashi hai !!
so please try to retreve them !
try……… try…….. u will get it in better form !
best of luck ! god bless u dear !!
Rewa Smriti said
Hi Arun sir,
hmmm….Thank you so much for your kind words and appreciation! Actually they lost but I tried to retreve thatsy I wrote this poem!
By the way thank you for your philosophical funda ’shabd to nayab hote hai, lagata hai ki kho gaye par khote nahi. Atma ki tarah pavitra aur amar avinashi hai’. Masah allah, wah kya khoob kaha hai aapne, I liked it.
Sir itni gyan ki baaten kab se karne lage ho aap? Ahobhagya mere jo aapne comment kiya.
Shukriya.
Ek Ajnabi said
किसी को ढूँढना और उसके लिए भटकना हमे नही मंज़ूर,
जीती हूँ एक्कीसवीं सदी में यह थोड़ा आप भी जान लें ज़रूर!
अब तो छोड़िए बहसबाज़ी, काम पर लग जाइए हुज़ूर,
शुक्रगुज़ार रहूंगी गर ख़ुदा को हो जाए आपकी ख़ुदाई क़बूल!
kritagya hue hum jaan ke aapke bichar huzur
hum kaam pe lag gaye hain ab nehin fikr huzur
hum waqt ka intzaar karenge jab khudai hogi kubul
ye ishq nehi asaan …
Keep Smiling
Ek Ajnabi …
Dr Vishwas Saxena said
Dear author
Words are linked to our thoughts.At times thoughts change so words vanish!Thoghts too are ignited by presence of some entity influencing aura of our life.If this entity is short lasting then dont feel bad about it ! Keep going and going and going—-!
And yes gather new words during this period!Blessings and wishes
Dr Vishwas Saxena